devil 'n' i got a thing going

by Elizabeth

Published March 14, 2005

In Old Poetry

Me too Brad, me too.
Truely touching, I am not good with constructive critisim so all I have to say for now is that your style is wonderful even though I am sure half the people reading them don't understand a word you're saying. :D

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Misty
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Misty wrote a review Review · May 6, 2005

it's been forever since I've critted your poems. But they're still as incredible as they were last month. I've gone through all of them and read them about three times each...i keep coming back to this website to read them again. They're all amazing, this one was probably my favorite. It's beautiful.

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Muse
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Muse commented Comment · May 4, 2005

i want nothing more
than stars above my head and
grass between my toes. i
want to feel the ocean
lead to sand lead to concrete
lead to you.


Very pretty. I love your work, its fantastic.

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Midnight
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Midnight commented Comment · May 1, 2005

mmm this was yummy.

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niteowl
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niteowl wrote a review Review · Mar 14, 2005

I loved it, but I have one little crit: Repeating the "i don't think you understand" thing doesn't seem to fit that well. And I think the way you break your lines seems disjointed. But I've always thought that. And I'm not the one teaching college English, am I?



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