You are so amazing...you take the same cliche topics that every teen poet writes--or, at least attempts to write and you turn it all around to something brand new that at least *I* have never seen before.
It's like...romance, I think...but in a different sense. Sort of hard to explain.
"...You made me remember
what my knees are for. You made me
believe in myself and you
make me feel in colors and
breathe in tastes you make me want
to hold you again."
That was my favorite part. I just kept reading it over and over.
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Beautiful..
"...You made me remember
what my knees are for. You made me
believe in myself and you
make me feel in colors and
breathe in tastes you make me want
to hold you again."
Also my favourite part. Aw, its sweet.
Random line breaks, but it was a good read. Sometimes I have no idea what you're blabbing on about, maybe that's a good thing?
Anyhoo, another poem to add to the collection...
"You made me remember
what my knees are for."
and
"All I want from you is to promise me that you will never die to live again."
were great...this is f--
blooming good. Wow.
This seemed softer than your other stuff, not that it was bad. It was really good. The really long last line... is that a trademark style or something of yours? Just wondering.
your work just kleeps on getting better and better brad..... and my boyfriend has fallen in love with you.
I honestly really liked it, and nobody is so deserving as grant is.... damnit i thougt his name was graham.... ;STUPID:
the poem was pretty. nothing to blow me away, but nice to read.
even if you had just written this line and nothing else, this poem would have been worth it:
"...You made me remember
what my knees are for."
because that was very good.