Monsters

well, water is not colorless so your symbol is flawed - may lead to misinterpretation - I just took it as natures view. And you know, you are not understanding ...

"I grew up being told that the first letter of a line was always capitalized and that many normal rules in English were still in place for poetry." 1. The ...

* the ceaseless comment was really how you used it. If you had said it like 'into a ceaseless grey drizzle' it would be fine, but you added in that ...

Th first stanza is better, the second stanza is WAY better. Now, I hit on the first stanza but I didn't explain myself too well - it's not really just ...

Oh okay, also good catch on that last punctuation. Thanks :)

I was defiantly hesitant to go back to rhyme scheme. It has been a longgggg time. Thanks for that comment. A little confused on why you think suddenly doesn't fit- ...

That's a style I picked up because I am a programmer, I wanted to cram them into the same word but at the same time show the reader were I ...

"I also don't think the person on the right gets fair treatment. " I think that point is illustrated by the second stanza almost obviously. :P The person on the ...

Yah it is a little harsh.

I made a review on formatting poetry on my old account-

That's a great attitude. The ageism comment was because you catch on pretty quick; it takes some 20 years to really 'get' poetry but for you, you understand alot of ...

Sometimes I just start clicking and I end up in some weird places. I'm not a fan of your other works. This one was most recent so I figured saying ...

Welcome!

I'm just giving you advice? How did you get me being mean out of that?

Well, I thought you wrote this but obviously not, same idea though.