Monsters

I think a little more conciseness and better diction can make this poem sparkle a bit. You got a good starting point but you have to leave the countless times ...

Hey rhiasofia, it's monsters. So firstly, I hope the font wasn't on purpose because it is hard to read. Although, that is besides the point of the review. I've read ...

"I imagine myself talking to you Face to face, so real." You did everything but show us here which is disappointing. You deal to much in abstractions and could use ...

Okay, so your first two stanzas are confusing. You initially told us that when your mood wilted so did the garden, and then you say they died once again after ...

Okay you change the color and depictions of your images a lot. You start to describe the heart as something strong like a concrete object or a rock and then ...

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So this is not very clear which leads me to question what it is you are actually looking at. What do you mean by rotted scales? What do the scales ...

Wow, Iggy. With your poems it sometimes feels like a hit or miss. This has some parts that are enjoying to read and offer some of the most critical, yet ...

Hey, I'll add the good parts after I get through with my criticisms on this poem. The cut, the cut upon my knee from falling down, a small way down. ...

My sanity is tripping, blood from my wrists is dripping. Me and my sanity fight on what is wrong and what is right. Slits across my wrist take away my ...

Oh good golly gosh, can we stop using the whole scars thing. There are so many things that hurt more than scars and are actually original. The whole poem after ...

Hey Kyllorac. You don't know me but I can be a fan of your writing at times. I didn't like this in particular because it's a little to easy to ...

Hello, Well, I say, fuck that. Way to perpetuate stereotypes that the ethist is emotionally aggressive. Why pin Christians against the wall and say it is me vrs. you? Why ...

Yeah, not very E E Cummings in my opinion. So I think this is awesome. I think it would even be a million times better if it slowed down a ...

okay so, The wicked witch, so tall and fair. The wicked witch is unoriginal and I don't understand what you mean by 'fair?' I think tall and fair is something ...