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  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: Questioning

    For me, it's a matter of personal style. Poems that prioritize ideology over substance, imagery, and so on, tend to resonate only with those who share the same views. Perhaps ...

    Jun 2, 2023
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Season Cycle

    You really have a remarkable talent for wordplay, and I must say, it's truly impressive. But what slightly throws me off is the lack of cohesiveness. It feels like the ...

    Jun 2, 2023
  • Poetry » General, General Re: for so long

    Let's be honest for a minute; we're all frauds comparatively. We review your work in the same semblance of a customer on yelp talking about their fries being to cold ...

    Jul 23, 2019
  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: Hypochondria

    This is too much to fast and not so focused, the reader wants details that can you can describe in a way that makes them excitable or see the imagery ...

    May 9, 2018
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: To Anyone Who Has Ever Looked up to Me

    Take this with a grain of salt, it's more of my rant against almost all the poems. I wish I could show you the tarnished parts of me, the moldy ...

    Feb 22, 2016
  • Article / Essay » Realistic, Politics Re: Equal Rights for Chimpanzees

    This will sound harsh. Sorry in advance. Frankly, this is a rambling mess that doesn't come to a conclusion at all. If I'm stuck trying to analyze what the writing's ...

    Feb 18, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: perfect on the surface, broken at the seams

    she is a girl who knows what it means to smile. This whole poem is like this sentence. It names a random disjointed piece of your intuition and gives the ...

    Feb 6, 2016
  • Poetry » Fantasy, General Re: A place between several seas

    I love this, but I feel it gets off to a bad start. I'd be remissed if I didn't say that the internal rhyme here isn't a little bit beautiful; ...

    Jan 21, 2016
  • Poetry » Horror, Realistic Re: If You Were a Monster

    Much better then "5 PM" but it's forced. You're too busy trying to resemble a perfect amount of syllables and keeping to your rhyme scheme that you forgot too express ...

    Jan 21, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: drowning

    I wasn't going to review this until I read your comment about wanting a critique and decided that you deserve one for this, almost great poem. For me, this is ...

    Jan 20, 2016
  • Poetry » Satire, Narrative Re: In Another God’s Land

    Hello, thanks for requesting this review on my thread but quite honestly, I could literally fall asleep to this. I'm not attacking you as a writer here, just the poem. ...

    Jan 20, 2016
  • Poetry » Horror, General Re: 5 pm

    Hello, I think this needs alot of work so rather than picking it apart I am going to give you a general impression of it. Please excuse the lack of ...

    Jan 20, 2016
  • Article / Essay » Humor, Science Re: The Most Misunderstood Numbers In The Whole World

    There was so much potential in this article, but I feel disappointed. It is a decent article but really not what I had in mind - I've taken most of ...

    Jan 14, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: To the Giants

    hello Caterpickle, thanks for the comment on my page, I figured you wouldn't mind a review from me. For your first poem it is not awful, you stuck to a ...

    Jan 14, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: i should have been home yesterday *edited*

    Hello Ladyspark, You have taken every usual step of an inexperienced writer here. 1. You write about the imagery of the mountain in a way that blends into the voice ...

    Jan 12, 2016


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