MissMiaFacinelli

Hi! I'm Mia, welcome to YWS! First off, I really liked this poem. There were a coyple of litttle nit-picks I spotted, however, and here they are! As we end ...

Wow! This was such an awesome piece! Rhyme scheme: check! Cool language: check! Grammar: great! Punctuation: ah. This is where the poem falls down a little. There is no punctuation ...

OK! Welcome to YWS! Now, when I clicked on your poem, I expected some Pride-and-Prejudice type Edwardian flowery poem about a ball or dance. What I got was a poem ...

OK! Hi, I'm Mia, welcome to YWS! OK, so your poem is quite good. However, it could do with punctuation at the end of each line. All poetry needs this, ...

OK! So, all in all, a really great poem, really sweet! It definitely reminded me of my friends! However, I did have a couple of problems with flow, there were ...

OK. I really liked this as an opening: it worked well. However, I would really like a little more information on Fletcher. What has he invented before? Why does he ...

Hey! This isn't really a review, but I thought it was against the rules to post the second part of a story on the same topic as the first part? ...

It was a great feeling. Love, an amazing chemical reaction in the brain was happening to him after many years.Lovely feelings in your brain makes you feel like you are ...

I really liked this poem! I loved the use of imagery with the bubble wand - I know the feeling! Some girls in my class want me to be different, ...

WOW! I was recently considering writing a sonnet, but didn't really have any idea how to start: maybe you could PM me some hints? I really liked this poem, it ...

Wow. This was a really provocative poem, and I found myself reading it twice. Just a couple of little points! Separates has an "a" in it, and controls has an ...

WOW! I'm not going to read this just yet, because at the moment, it's one big block of text, not really poem-y at all. When I first clicked on it, ...

Joseph was late. This was unusual. Joseph, for as long as he could remember, always was punctual. Something unusual must be going on. These were the thoughts of Mr. Sean ...

Wow. I really loved this story! I clicked on it half-heartedly, thinking it would be another copy, and at first I didn't understand it: I thought it was Edward and ...

This started off awesomely! I really thought it was going to be a little longer than it was but it was still cool. One little point though: the first laughter ...