Published November 10, 2009
Crash into me and we'll hurry in a flight.
Together we will travel faster than the speed of light.
Transcending the boundaries of time and space,
As we end up in our own special place.
The velvet sky carpeted with stars,
And the lonesome moon with its unbearable scar,
Will be the witness for our undying love.
Come to me my love, and take all that I have.
Hiding from the intriguing eyes of the world,
Running from the judgmental edge of the sword.
No they can never take the fire out of us,
Instead making sure that this flame will last.
So seek inside my heart and see what's in store for you,
A love with many facets that had always been true.
Climb into my shoulders as we wait for the sunrise,
I'll kiss you in the morning light, my beloved prize.
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Hi.
I liked your poem. I think that your poem isn't about a loved one as it first seemed, more of a object...or himself? That the 'prize' is on his shoulder?
You spelled know liked no but, apart from that, it was good!
Thankyou so much for the read, it was enlightening,
Woozey
hi..yah i missed those things..thank you for the time..
Hi! I'm Mia, welcome to YWS!
First off, I really liked this poem. There were a coyple of litttle nit-picks I spotted, however, and here they are!
Should this be ?
It's should be its
OK. From here on in, I started having problems with the rhyme scheme (or not rhyme-scheme) Rhyming "love" with "have"?
Apart from that, however, great job!
Keep writing!