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MissCaroline

MissCaroline

  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The Girl with the Heart Shaped Glasses

    I really liked the description in this! It was really cute and sweet. You highlighted the points perfectly with the "What If's". The story had so many details and I ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Echoes

    Along with what Kayfortnight had said, I believe this chapter has to be expanded on a ton. I don't know if we can fully classify this as a chapter yet. ...

    May 8, 2013
  • Short Story » Supernatural, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Smiling Man

    This is probably the best story I have read on this site so far. This was truly amazing and I know it will stick with me for a while. I ...

    May 3, 2013
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Romantic Re: Love Kills

    This story was really depressing and dark. I like these kind of stories that actually make me feel something. I really enjoyed the suspense that was going on throughout. It ...

    May 3, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Satire Re: My Ghost

    Short and sweet and to the point. I don't believe a poem has to have a certain length as long as it has meaning. This poem has meaning. I enjoyed ...

    Apr 30, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: The Terrifying Camps; Memories of a Dead Man

    This was a very powerful poem. I have just got done with my Holocaust learning section in school, so I have more of an understanding on this topic. I really ...

    Apr 29, 2013
  • Script » Fanfiction, General Re: Act III

    Ohhh how I love Harry Potter. I'll never forget the moment I finished the series and I was just like, "Well now what?" This was very entertaining to read. I ...

    Apr 29, 2013
  • Short Story » Horror, Dramatic Re: A Twisted Torture

    Oh how I love dark, deathly stories... This was so evil in every way and I loved every bit of it. I could feel myself actually wincing when they cut ...

    Apr 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Tribute to a Beautiful Girl

    Hello Madame! Firstly, the descriptors you used in this poem were phenomenal. It helped me really connect to the writing and it gave me a clear mind picture. I love ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Haunted

    Woahhh! This was a very saddening poem! I liked the emotional feelings it gave you when you read it. I feel like the suicide at the end is definitely a ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: Waiting for You

    This poem flowed so beautifully! Everything with the breaks in the lines and the stanzas was perfect. I enjoyed reading this because I could feel her sadness. The description of ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Lyrics » Romantic, Realistic Re: You Know Nothing

    I personally use repetition a lot in my writing. I mostly use it to get an important point or feeling across. I could feel that in this! I could feel ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: A Note For a Date

    Awwwww! Why can't anyone be this sweet to me? :) This was so lovely! I got all mushy inside! The last stanza for me was the best. It was just ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Dramatic Re: Two People

    Holy long lines! I feel like before I say anything else, you should make the lines shorter, like break them up more. I also think you should include a second ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Spiritual Re: I will be free

    I could sort of relate to this poem because I too have questions about the Higher Being and religion and all that jazz. It's all a mystery to me really. ...

    Apr 28, 2013


“Rise like Lions after slumber In unvanquishable number. Shake your chains to earth like dew Which in sleep had fallen on you— Ye are many—they are few.”
— Mary Shelly