There is a girl
Whose hair is ebony,
Whose eyes are mahogany,
Whose skin is milky.
She steps on stage,
A work of art for everyone to see.
Her smile lights up the room
And is a beacon to people in pain.
Kindness radiates from her pores like
An invisible sweat that never leaves.
When she sings, her voice takes flight
And soars far above the stratosphere.
How can a girl so perfect exist?
How can she be on this Earth, when
All around people are so cruel?
This is my tribute to a beautiful girl.
A girl so wonderful, who has a heart,
Who is willing to stand up for what
She loves.
This is my tribute to the girl I love, a
Truly beautiful girl.
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Hello Madame!
I would also change the title to this poem. You already stated "This is my tribute to the girl I love" in the ending stanza, so why not change the title into something more meaningful? Perhaps you could put the girl's name as the title? Just a thought. 
Firstly, the descriptors you used in this poem were phenomenal. It helped me really connect to the writing and it gave me a clear mind picture. I love it! I just get so happy when poetry is written so well it gives me shivers. Which is exactly what this managed to do.
Secondly, I agree with Roxy. I would also change the beginning from "there is a girl" to "there is this girl". It just helps it seem like you actually know her.
~MissCaroline
Hello!
Roxy here with a few suggestions! 
If you are talking about a specific girl, then i would start off with "there is this girl" as "a" makes it sounds general as if you dont know who you are talking about
"Whose hair is ebony,
Whose eyes are mahogany,
Whose skin is milky."
I would probably say something like:
"she has hair like ebony,
her eyes are mahogany
and her skin is milky"
But that could just be me, I like things phrased in a certain way
I really do like it though, Its lovely and sweet
--Roxy