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Re: Chapter 13: Her
Thanks for the review! I haven't been updating this very often but reading your reactions has been so much fun, it's motivating me. :))) Stay safe!
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 12: Footprint
So on further reflection something like a laser would've been much better than clay. And the Government is pretty organized; it's just these two that aren't. :) Thanks for the ...
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 11: Relief
Thank you for the review! This is the fastest I've ever gotten reviews before. I should get better at updating too; I haven't been keeping up with it. Perhaps I ...
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 10: Knows
They get along fast for a very good reason, which I can't tell because it would spoil the story. Thanks for the review!
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 9: Tunnel
A chapter with the sole purpose of building suspense, yeah? There was a lot I found helpful in your review; thanks for that. :D
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 8: Fireball
I forgot all about them telling Boss! And no, they can't. And I feel that Ashe is ordering around a lot for the amount of time she stayed there. Thanks ...
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 7: Experiment
And the plot takes on some holes as well as some complications. I'm just writing this as I go without planning, so fingers crossed I'll be able to keep up ...
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 6: Contract
Yeah, very much regretting the overuse of instant noodles XD. Maybe if I space out the backstory it'll hinder the plot less. Thanks for the review!
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 5: Willow
It's been a while since I read these chapters and whoa, my writing has changed a lot. Or has it? And the instant noodles are probably because my brother was ...
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 3: Climb
Yes, the info-dumping is very prominent. When I redo this chapter, I'll probably get rid of most of that paragraph. Thanks for the review!
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 2: Heist
Yeah, I was 13 and clueless when I wrote this and it shows. ^^' And it does dump a ton of info, so I'll have to work on fixing that. ...
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 1: Gone
Thank you! I was considering changing the opening for this story in the rewrite, but now I'm considering keeping it..? And sorry for the late reply; I literally just saw ...
Jul 7, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 19: Chance
More conversation is coming, by the way. So are their plans to escape. We'll see if they succeed, though. Thanks for the review!
Jun 1, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 19: Chance
Yeah, I know >
Jun 1, 2020 -
Re: Chapter 18: Dark
Yeah, the ending does feel a bit abrupt, so I might go back and add more to the chapter later. Thanks for the review!
Mar 18, 2020