Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
And I'm back for the last two chapters of this.
First Impression: Well things getting even crazier now. Also I really want to punch Kat in the face. *tries to calm himself*
Anyway let's get right to it,
I drift back into consciousness at muffled sounds. "…the intruder should be… yes, I know, but… just a boy… Huh? … 'who he is'? What do you…" A pause, then another voice starts, this one higher and fading in and out with my heartbeat. "I'm telling you… he's different… we can use him…"
Use… who? Something about this…
doesn't seem right.
The voices move away, their footsteps fading.
A strange tingling feeling spreads through my body, pins and needles jolting every nerve, ending at my eyes. Sparks fly through their backs, and pain floods and pulses through my head, at once sharp and dull.
"Aaaghhn…"
This earlier part is just beautiful. This and the next couple of paragraphs do such an amazing job of conveying the confusion of her situation. Oh my god that part is simply awesome.(You can see I am running out of synonyms for amazing). It's just....perfect.
The boy above has sharp, narrow features, with a straight, angular nose and high cheekbones. His head is almost shaved on one side, a thin layer of blond barely visible. But on the other side, his hair hangs long and somewhere between straight and wavy, falling over his left ear and parts of his face. A healing gash peeks out from under his hair, a slash of pink that stands out against his skin.
Well it looks like this is maybe that boy who was treating Kyre's sister...uhh...Hal I think. Maybe. He definitely looks like he picked a fight or two.
The solvent is in a vial with glass so thick it looks like the green liquid is floating inside. He dips a cloth in it and carefully wipes it over the back of my hand. The solvent is cool, and quickly feels like it's freezing my hand through, but still feels better than the empty numbness from earlier.
So he's authorized to have these things or did he just steal those? Also won't the bandage give away the fact that someone helped her and then obviously someone would launch an investigation. Also they have so many cameras but none of them are found inside the place where prisoners are kept?
“I’m not supposed to be here. I’ll try to find you again soon, but you absolutely cannot tell anyone I was here unless you want us both to be erased.”
So her location changes constantly? Or does he mean that he has to find time?
Kat's face peers at me, expressionless and hard.
One thing I realized just now. If Kat is doing all this where is the other bloke that was working with her to track down Kyre. Did he just like give up and let Kat handle it?
My face must have betrayed what I'm thinking, because Kat smiles, saying the words with obvious pleasure.
*urge to repeatedly punch in the face intensifies*
I hate her so much.
Me too Kyre. Me too..
And that's it.
Overall: This parts is really well done. The tension is just built up so well giving us a flicker of hope in the beginning while making it seem like everything is lost in the next part. Anyway now I'm almost afraid to read the next chapter. If that ends in a cliffhanger....
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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