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Yeah, well good job.

I know, I also read the prologue for this, I just didn't comment on it. I'l get to Devil's Touch later.

So, really mysterious beginning, I'll be moving onto chapter 1.

OK, that clears up some things.

I can't wait for the time when my characters become this real . . . well I think I can't. If I have any characters like Fiera it might not ...

I'll look at the flower-girl part, but it is the second girl who speaks, not the flower-girl. I understand how the guard might not suspect it to a be a ...

This was very moving poem. Your rhyming was good, your description of how close yet apart the two characters are was really good, overall a great poem. So far everything ...

See Vivian, dragonphoenix can come up with way better names.

I hope you do, it's got me hooked!

OK, I changed the natural pond sentence, the despair one as well, and the beginning of the second paragraph. I left the strap parts, I think that's the best way ...

Oh, I don't have one right now. In my book I have a king that has no name, but that's because it first-person. Anyway, Duncan is good king name, btu ...

This is a semicolon ; I don't know what the king's name is, but you didn't mention it.

I'll get on this stuff right away. I'm not too surprised about all the mess-ups , seeing as when I started this it wasn't supposed to be a full book. ...