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Re: Up to No Good
Knight Malachi here to Review for Review Day. Hey, lookie here, I found something I hadn't reviewed for you previously:) So when I noticed it was with "superheroes" I thought ...
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Re: Hunger
Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day!!!! Aren't you excited? Anyway . . . This is the second or third of your short writings that I have read, and ...
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Re: i hear the roaring footsteps of an army of dead men
Knight Malachi back to begin Review Day reviews again. This was very good, and very well thought out. your metaphoric language went well, and I especially liked the lines: i ...
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Re: Constellation of thoughts
Knight Malachi here to review for the Knights of the Green Room, and Review Day/ blue team. Just reading the first few lines impressed me. they were beautiful! Whence the ...
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Re: Friends
Knight Malachi to review for Review Day. Negative first. I agree with ajruby12 that the first four lines could use better rhyming. I saw no other errors, but i didn't ...
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Re: Mayday Chapter 1
Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. Paragraph one is composed of short sentences. Now some short sentences are fine, but not when you have this many. A small ...
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Re: Nothing Sweet
Knight Malachi for team blue on Review Day. As well as Green Room reviews. When I cut the second time I believe it should be: "When I cut myself the ...
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Re: Leprosy
Knight Malachi for the Green Room review, as well as blue team on Review Day. This poem was very well written, and i liked the flow of it. i don't ...
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Re: Palm Reading
Knight Malachi here to review for the YWS Default Backgrounds, on Review Day. So I don't really know the meaning of palm reading; is it a certain type of writing/reading? ...
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Re: Beautiful Love
Knight Malachi here to Review on Review day/night here in the USA. So this was very nicely done. I liked how it seemed as if the love died, and then ...
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Re: story success
Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. so this idea sound fantastic to me. This sounds like it could b a really Really interesting book. I am writing a ...
Sep 29, 2013 -
Re: Hallelujah
Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. So I don't really know what this was about either. I was confused as to whether or not this in commemoration of ...
Sep 29, 2013 -
Re: This, My Excavation
Knight Malachi here to Review for Review Day. So I don't know who Bon Iver is (please don't pound if he is famous") So this poem to me was weird. ...
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Re: Lacuna
Knight Malachi here to review for Review Day. I am claiming this for my badge to review another Green Room Knight, the name of the badge escaping my mind AT ...
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Re: The Nameless Generation - Prologue
Knight Malachi here to review on Review Day. This story was very nicely written, and very well detailed until Stephen heated up the milk. the night seemed to pass with ...
Sep 29, 2013
