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Re: "Concrete Jungle"
The Messenger Knight here to review for Happy Review Day! I fly above a concrete jungle, A bird's-eye view of a cement paradise. I think you don't have to put ...
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Re: Lesser Being Chapter 2
The Messenger Knight here to review for Happy Review Day!!!! "Please don't do it! It's too strong, even for a big Amazon like you! Please, don't go!" cried the youth. ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Lesser Being Chapter 1
The Messenger Knight here to review Happy Review Day! "You should be sleeping Isabel, You need a comma after sleeping, I think. "Why me?! Surely, Gen should be the one ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: When The Rain Falls - Chapter 03
The Messenger Knight here to review for you, and KotGR. Happy Review Day! you shall be expecting it to come every day. The bold word needs to be added. I ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: To Fall or Rise: Chapter 3
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! Merin sat with her legs crossed on her hard cot in the dark room one of the sisters had ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: edit:(1)- Faceless beyond Scrutiny
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! So, I would just say this: re-read and find out how many times you start a sentence with "Th" ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: The thing unseen
The Messenger Knight here to review for you. Last one for tonight on Review Day!! So, big problem: Punctuation. It makes reading this hard for me and others. I don't ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: The Stars (Re-written)
the Messenger Knight here to review for you on Review Day. I saw your request on your wall and thought I'd oblige. So, glad I got to this after it ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Anyone
The Messenger Knight here to review for you on Review Day!! So, I think the first three paragraphs could all be connected. Because they all star with "And" it, at ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Random
The Messenger Knight here to review on a wonderful review day, full of wonderful reviews. So, what have we got here? Oh, a haiku? I like those! Anyway . . ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Sing
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR on a Review Day!!!! So, I really liked how you used the metaphor of flying like a bird, and the metaphor of ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: My Scar
The Messenger Knight here to review for you again, as a KotGR, on a wonderful Review Day! Each time the walls got smaller,my soul shrank with it. Trapped in your ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Shimmer II: Unicorn Genocide - Chapter 1
The Messenger Knight Here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! There was a small movement in the grass, near what used to be a healer’s cottage. You can cut ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Dear Skylar, I'm Coming Home
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. where I can stand without thoughts of fears, The comma needs to be switched to a period. to return back to your ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: How does giving up smoking affect lives?
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! Smoking is inhaling smoke from burning paper and tobacco using a cigarette. I think a comma is needed after ...
Oct 27, 2013