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Re: edit:(1)- Faceless beyond Scrutiny
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! So, I would just say this: re-read and find out how many times you start a sentence with "Th" ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: The thing unseen
The Messenger Knight here to review for you. Last one for tonight on Review Day!! So, big problem: Punctuation. It makes reading this hard for me and others. I don't ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: The Stars (Re-written)
the Messenger Knight here to review for you on Review Day. I saw your request on your wall and thought I'd oblige. So, glad I got to this after it ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Anyone
The Messenger Knight here to review for you on Review Day!! So, I think the first three paragraphs could all be connected. Because they all star with "And" it, at ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Random
The Messenger Knight here to review on a wonderful review day, full of wonderful reviews. So, what have we got here? Oh, a haiku? I like those! Anyway . . ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Sing
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR on a Review Day!!!! So, I really liked how you used the metaphor of flying like a bird, and the metaphor of ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: My Scar
The Messenger Knight here to review for you again, as a KotGR, on a wonderful Review Day! Each time the walls got smaller,my soul shrank with it. Trapped in your ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Shimmer II: Unicorn Genocide - Chapter 1
The Messenger Knight Here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! There was a small movement in the grass, near what used to be a healer’s cottage. You can cut ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Dear Skylar, I'm Coming Home
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. where I can stand without thoughts of fears, The comma needs to be switched to a period. to return back to your ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: How does giving up smoking affect lives?
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! Smoking is inhaling smoke from burning paper and tobacco using a cigarette. I think a comma is needed after ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Ennui (The Media Center)
the Messenger Knight here to review for KotGr. Happy review day! like soggy rope Underneath the sea without hope Oh boy, this really threw me off. In fact a lot ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Count To Ten
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! So, I was going to show you which part I liked best in this poem. all of it! I ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Tendencies
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Anything that managed to only splattered. I am confused with this line. I am assuming you have some typo or grammar error. ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Unbroken
The Messenger here to review! Happy Review Day! The doctors dressed in green smocks and masks poked and prodded me, stabbing needles into my arm and listening to my heart. ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Dreamers/Fighters
the Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Happy Review Day! :) your first paragraph was lovely and I didn't see any problems. and forced no longer himself to play ...
Oct 27, 2013