Megrim

Hi there! Megrim cruising through the green room for review day. I thought I'd offer a few general comments to help readability. I think a big reason you haven't gotten ...

I think you have a great sense for where to end chapters. Obviously, Pender's not been left behind, but you ended on a high point of tension to keep us ...

Hey there, Megrim here, cruising through the green room for stuff that looks interesting. I love this! You do a wonderful job with the imagery--there's a real sense of eerie, ...

Neat start! I was kind of wondering if she WOULD get turned into a ghost, and the story would be about her learning about ghost life and haunting the alley ...

I really liked this one. I'm not sure whether I prefer it being left mysterious, or if I would have liked a more concrete answer. I've been trying to figure ...

Alrighty, so what do I think about this one... at 900 words, it's flash fiction, and it does feel like it. I can see how the writing prompt influenced the ...

Ah, neat. I had a change of heart while I was reading. Initially I was like "this is obviously a library, and being so coy about it isn't winning me ...

Aha! Now we're in familiar territory. At 258 words, this is solidly microfiction, which is my new pet hobby while waiting to get my novel MS back. In this realm, ...

Onward we go! Here is another one where I like the story well enough, I certainly don't dislike it, but at the same time, I found it very... underwhelming. Like, ...

I'm suspicious that this is another early piece of your writing, as it has that same style prose I think you've learned from and grown out of--namely, the wordy, unbroken ...

This one's very similar to that other one! Must have come from the same inspiration ;) I liked the other one better, if we're comparing the two. This one seems ...

I don't have too much to say about this one, really. The concept, the voice, and the prose all hold together pretty well. It reminds me of Poe a bit ...

This is strange... I'm 90% sure I've read this story before on another site. Have you put a different version of this up on any other writing sites? It's not ...

Whoops I meant to review this one yesterday, but I was doing it at work and then stuff came in for me to do. So this is an interesting one! ...

Okay, this one is quite long, so I'm going to type as I read or I'm sure I'll forget things I wanted to say. First impressions: oh my, BIG paragraphs. ...