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Take out the Japanese. If you don't speak a language, don't use it. (Fangirl* Japanese makes me twitch a little. I think every animé fan uses it at least once, ...

She stares at him [s]across[/s] over the endless sea of [s]endless[/s] desks. [s]At him.[/s] [s]Does he know her? Probably not. Does she know him? Of course.[/s] She folds a piece ...

Under My Skin [s]I can't wait for tommorow And neither can you[/s] You are [s]never[/s] under my skin . You [s]and only[/s] you can stay t here , You know[s]?[/s] ...

I like the first line and the last, but none in between, except maybe "the venom enters my veins/ ... /rushing towards my brain." I think this is an issue ...

Not bad, but maybe a little too literal. The line "between me and the popular kids" invokes Snacky's law and also makes the poem a little restrictive. Maybe its just ...

Did you hear what hear did I? ... try saying that out loud. It makes no sense. I had to say it, like, ten times to figure out what it ...

I lie on the couch watching the curtains move slowly; (1) my eyes are the only sense that I can trust now. (2) I cannot feel him [s]there[/s] anymore, I ...

Like everyone else, I'm not sure I'd think of vampires right off if it weren't for the title and author's note, but I think that's okay. A little ambiguity never ...

Snoink - You know, I never would have thought to edit that way, but it's a really handy tip. Thank you. Pervert the sewer’s angels Flying with clipped wings I ...

I envy the Dragon, Born under a lucky star. You already know who you are. I know the feeling. (I was born about a month too late to be a ...

*This is just sucky poem I wrote. Don't hate me cause I posted something that's so bad. But, I just decided to write something. Meh.* No! Bad, bad, bad! Don't ...

Dwelling, stabbing, angst. Oh, bad: bad, bad, bad. :evil: I wanted to stop reading at that. It was just so bad . I ... ow. The word "angst" is a) ...

Yikes. This is kind-of a train wreck. This poem, I'm sad to say, is really going nowhere. Hear me out, though. First, I'd like to point you in the direction ...

Very interesting, although I can't credit you with the concept, I think you did it really well. (I'm sort of curious what your whole name is, but I understand why ...

I like this a lot. I love the line about "cigarette finger tips." I was a little worried when you started with "coal black eyes," though. I was like ugh, ...