Published August 28, 2007
Our creative writing teacher, for the first day of school, is having us do a found poem using our full names. (we can only use words we can make with letters from our names). To make it easier, however, she is allowing us to use conjunction words as well. So here it is.
Fickle
Here I am,
Solid but disembodied.
Here I am,
A demon and a sublime shade.
Here I am,
A sire and a son.
Here I am,
Human.
---Ohi D.
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I liked it but I don't know why it was called fickle maybe you could show that more or maybe its just me.
Good work!
charlotte
Haha I didn't quite get the concept for the poem but I really liked the poem anyway.
I liked the way the "here I am" part follwoed through the whole of the poem and then it was followed by just one simple line (:
Great work!
Very interesting, although I can't credit you with the concept, I think you did it really well. (I'm sort of curious what your whole name is, but I understand why you wouldn't want to post that.)
I didn't like the last stanza; I see what you were going for, but it doesn't fit quite right. Is there anything you can do with it to make it flow better with the rest?
cool......i loved it!
I rather liked this. Simple, and an interesting concept, with the name and jazz, muchas annoying if you have a hard name though i suppose hehe. Either way I think as a poem this is more than acceptable. nice work.
I like this. I may try something like that!
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