MeadowLark

Hiya! Hmm, terribly short and not much to review. However, I could give you a few hints here and there. Firstly, get rid of the caps. No one likes to ...

Hey Deathstar! I find it awfully sad that this happens to so many families. I hear it on the news all the time and usually no one survives such a ...

Hiya Emma! Ugh, I hate bullies. Really, I think little children have got to be some of the worst bullies 'cause sometimes they just don't understand what they're doing is ...

Hiya Skittles! Miss me? "State your name," that same females voice ordered, this time alone but just as powerful. "...the same female voice ordered." Doesn't sound right with that, and ...

Hiya Felix! Stanley Yates and I sit on a park bench looking out across the city. First off, your opening line needs to be a bit stronger to lure the ...

Hiya there Emerald! You have an excellent starting line, but I feel it's a tad bid cliched. Character wakes up to find self in an unusual setting and no memory ...

Heya there Skittles! This is an good start to your story. It was very interesting and you've got me intrigued. Your character's thoughts are well thought out and we get ...

Heya there Saturdays! Such a simple a cute little poem. It does remind one of Shel Silverstein's poems. Speaking of which, I should actually find some of his collections... I've ...

Haha, awesome Ellie! Very entertaining, but then again, most YWS fanfics are. I like this new approach you took on writing a fanfic. From an outsiders point of view. Unless ...

Snickers! Welcome to YWS! Lornath had been young, charismatic, and ambitious when he rose to his kingship in the largest kingdom of humans, M’ram. I thought Lornath was an elf. ...

Hiya Thajaro! Welcome to YWS :D I loved this little story. I enjoyed the way the house was trying to play tricks on its owner and the way it protected ...

Hiya there Sophia! This is an interesting piece and you hooked me in right away with your opening line. I enjoyed the description you used throughout the entire chapter for ...

Heya there Wolf. It is rather difficult to understand what your story is actually about as the reader really has no clue into what is going on. From what I'm ...

Wow, that's really short xD Not much to review... You say it's supposed to be short, but you could make it longer by elaborating on the MC's fear and adding ...

Heya there Powers. Short and sweet prologue :D Maya slid the knife across her skin. Not the catchiest of starter lines. Try to spice it up and really make it ...