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Hello lin night. First off: Please, please, please go back through this and look for any grammatical errors. There are many, but nothing really major. Second: Like SeraphTree said, you ...

The only thing worse than the acoustics in a live concert (for those a million feet from the stage, the losers with back-row tickets) are: The fans. Tiny sweat drops ...

“For once, mom, will you just listen to me?” Evelyn shouted at her mother. “I always listen!” “But you don’t hear me!” “Evelyn," her mother said sternly, "you know I ...

Hey again Derek. Just like last time, all my comments and corrections will be in bold. Chapter 2 The Beginning of the End Dizzy from the lasting blow to his ...

Hey Derek! If you have any questions, PM me please! All my comments or corrections are in bold. Book 1: Fabled Chapter 1: Intro An explosion outside the castle window ...

I'll be critiquing as i read... “Okay.” I pushed Sasha away. As great as she was being, I was feeling like I wanted to fall into her arms and break ...

I'll be critiquing as i read... At that moment a stocky, balding man waddled toward him with a digital readout tablet. It was a device which wouldn't come out to ...

I'll be critiquing while i read. Remember, this is just my opinion, so if you want, feel free to disregard all of it. It’s hard to realize just how much ...

I'll be critiquing as i read. It may be things already said so if they are, ignore them. Gathers stood behind stalls selling the crop that they grew over the ...

Realy good. I cant wait to see more. Looks like angel and billy already beat me to all the mistakes i saw, so i do't have much more to tell ...

I'm not good at critiquing poetry, but this was really cute and made me giggle. Something i don't do often while reading. So i congratulate you on that. Keep it ...

*Sorry it's late, thing. My dad kicked me off without even letting me save what i had already done. But here's my crit.* Pretty good. You have the plot down ...

Pretty good. I'm no good at critiquing poetry, so I'll leave it to the pro's. But it flows pretty well and it talks about something everyone goes through in their ...

First off: Very good. I liked the style and it flowed pretty well. I only have a few suggestions, and they're only my personal opinion so it's up to you ...

A beautiful piece of writing, if i do say so myself. I could clearly picture every scene in my mind, which is great! I loved this and how you explained ...