Nice poem!
I love how you made it all so abstract and evenso, how it's all so true.
Your punctuation, spelling and main idea is very good!
However, the only thing I found is that you may want to change "Belonged or not Belonged" (second line) for it never sounds right in poems when you repeat two words in the same line.
Anyhow, if you don't change it I'd understand, for it sounds good anyway.
Janis
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