Master_Yoda

I've got an exam tomorrow, but remind me to review this. Your writing has improved magnificently Brynn.

As an Engineer, I cannot condone so blasphemous a poem.

You are wrong. This is better.

Thank you, Lava. Just wondering if you could clarify what you mean by too easy a way to end?

Thank you chris. I'm incredibly flattered to have my work compared with the scarlet letter. I'm glad you felt that my poem spoke to you.

Threnody, it's clear that she that she was using the doll to mentally replace her dead baby. What was unclear was that her husband shot the baby as a response ...

Thanks, Karzkin. You sure know how to flatter a guy. Maybe I'll make the romantic imagery a little sharper, though I doubt I could remove it entirely. A large part ...

Your story will need a rewrite eventually, but for now I suggest pushing forward, and trying to draw focus away from dialogue and your MC's personality and directing it towards ...

Isn't it a little early to be preparing for Valentine's Day, Ten?

I cracked up at the end.

Thanks Firepup. Great review. I understand and agree with your point about the latter part of the story. Honestly, I don't know whether your rewrite helps the problem much, but ...

Thanks a million Mahalo. This is purposefully minimalist. I understand your sentiments however, and the story could definitely use a little description, but I wanted the focus of the reader ...

Thanks a million Kyll. You are spot on with the change of narrative consistency. I have been trying to find ways to make narrative voice shifts go unnoticed, andwas unsure ...

Thank you, Shinobi. I really appreciate the detailed review and thick flattery. Your point on the hysterically is very appreciated. I would never have picked up on that. Also, as ...

Thanks for your review Storm. Glad you liked it.