Mars

Hello, hello! Hope, vain as it may be, never dies, I like this first stanza, it has a good rhythm. [s]Tears,[/s] the only thing they do I'm not sure you ...

Hello and welcome! On YWS, one of the rules is to spread the love. Post two reviews for every one work of your own. This is how we keep the ...

Hey aloha! So Sonny is...Sage, right? Might be a good idea to choose one or the other, otherwise it's a bit confusing; I thought we had three main characters at ...

Huge, huge, huge apologies for lateness. :oops: Anyway. When Sheanna looked around the first thought that came into her head was, Thoughts...plural? As there's more than one? :P Sheanna decided ...

Hey Bryan! The rule here is to do two reviews for every work of your own that you post, so as to keep the site running and whatnot. If you're ...

Hello! Within the pages of this book, A secret has been buried; Encoded with words of today; Hidden by an unknown author. Very, very nice first stanza; it sets up ...

Hey Thunder! A (belated) welcome to YWS. This poem is heartbreakingingly sweet, I think. I really like how when I saw the title, I figured the three words would be ...

Hello! as the spider’s stand, waiting. Should this be spiders, without the apostrophe, if it's plural? That's the only way it makes sense, although later you only mention one spider ...

Okay, first of all, I'm sososososososo sorry this has taken so long. she probably shouldn’t of said those words *shouldn't have But again it faded into this girl, standing before ...

Exp, I'm going to attempt to do an actual critique here, but you should know that I was already LOLing at 'honey bunches of oats.' :P A quick note: I ...

Hello! I am growing closer. My end is near. I cannot cope anymore. Someone save me. Please? I think this is a fairly weak way to open a poem; it's ...

Hey! I very much liked this, Suzie. You told us just enough through the medical staff, and Asher and Danni, and even though I don't know how Bliss lost her ...

Whoa...how have you gone a week without reviews?! :P I'm going to start out being picky - correcting grammar, maybe rewording if it sounds stiff, then I'll go on to ...

This is epically sweet. The only thing I don't like is how you describe it as a PURE white daisy before saying it has a purple streak because, wouldn't that ...

Hey! Like Dusty, I really enjoyed this, but there are a couple of things that could use improvement: Can One chart the course of one's destiny? I don't think 'one' ...