Mars

I fail. >< then she [s]really[/s] was in real life, *than. Also, using both really and real is redundant, methinks. Immediately she realized it pink and black; *it was, right? ...

Hello :) The beginning of this chapter is a little confusing, mainly because you don't tell us what the setting is. At work the next morning, on the phone that ...

I fail. Epically. I'm sorry. I could feel my face light up, not knowing how to stop them. What's the 'them'? That should be referring to Merry's face, the subject ...

Hi! And silk and perfume This is a really tiny suggestion but I think you should have a period there, because you had one with rosary and it's a bit ...

Hi! MAJOR APOLOGIES for taking so long to review this. I've had some other stuff going on and school's just about to finish but anyway, here I am now. :) ...

I suck. Because I was totally going to review this earlier. But I didn't. Sorry >< I'm not sure how useful I can be though, because I think mainly the ...

Hi :) Just a few things I wanted to point out; overall I really like this poem, but I think there are some odd bits. That’s what I’d let you ...

Wow, Jared. This is - well, I'm not sure how to describe it but it's certainly good writing. Wonderful writing. Every little section was well done, very different, but well ...

Heya! One week late, but here I am. I'll attempt to review this having (obviously) not read the rest of it :P which issued a resistant crreeeeeeeeaak. I think 'issued' ...

I know this took me way too long and I'm sorry but I'm here now! *reviews* his father’s elegant green tunic. Yeah, this description is way out of place. I ...

*continues* It rang again and again and again, Don't really thing you need the last 'and again' here, it's sort of annoying. Which actually kind of mirrors the annoying of ...

Sorry this took so long! Busy weekend. Week. Month, really. I'll be extra nitpicky to make up for it. I shouldn't cry. *shouldn't have cried It felt almost like a ...

Hiya Shina! Here as promised. So! I love this poem; even though the rhyming is quite strict I think you've pulled it off in many places and I also love ...

*snuggleattacks!* You won't read this before I (hopefully) see you again, but that's okay.

Hey octocoffee, I'm here...finally. I know, I know, I'm awful. >< So! First stanza : I love it. I think it was a really brilliant way to start, especially the ...