Mars

Hi! Brown like Hershey’s chocolate , but not like coca Rawr. I don't like the Hershey's chocolate comparison because it ruins the whole lovely image of the boy and the ...

Hello! He directed this last question to Robin. Since it's his first question as well, you don't need the last in there. ^^ Okay, so let me first say that ...

Hello! So, I think you have a great idea here and I like it, I really only have one problem. And that's the beginning. The first stanza is way too ...

So...I think I'm addicted to your poetry. Seriously. I love this. Everything works wonderfully, especially the Mississippi analogy (metaphor? simile? :P) and coupled with the stanza that's in second p

Hello! You certainly have a way with words, and the way this is set up makes me wonder if you've done prose? If so, I'd like to read it. There ...

Hello! Before I get into the review, I need to point out that you only have one review; please do another so you can keep up with our 2:1 ratio ...

Hello! I don't like the lyrics at the beginning. If lyrics are totally necessary (which, honestly, they probably aren't) at least put them in a spoiler or space them out ...

Hello! I looked at the blue and black banner before me. I looked down at the legion marching below me , So, right away, this bit is way too repetitive. ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS, Soul (if I can call you that). We have this rule that you should review two works by others before you post your own (and keep ...

Hm, I like this. It's simply and prettily written, and flows quite nicely. One thing I would change is the 'my' in the fourth line. Seems out of place and ...

Hello! This poem has a couple of swear words in it - please rate it R. :) Every night she’d pray to you, But every day you ignore the truth. ...

Hello again! Is this a sonnet? I love sonnets. And this looks like an English one; ABABCDCDEFEFGG. Except you have one extra quatrain, so I suppose not a proper one. ...

Hey closetwriter, welcome to YWS. :) One of our rules is to keep a 2:1 ratio of reviews to your own works posted, so we can make sure everyone gets ...

Hello! I must agree. This was very nice, and not just because it's one of my favorite types of poetry (and, incidentally, the one I'm worst at). I especially loved ...

Hey! So, I really liked this. Especially the 'let the floods flow on' lines. Lovely, as you're using the sound of fl twice in a row actually sounds like flowing, ...