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Re: Love
This is perhaps the most the greatest example of wishful thinking, but the concept is ludicrous. For one, people are narcissistic parasites who think that whatever they or their storybook ...
Jun 16, 2016 -
Re: The Obelisk
Nice job, the story is actually really good, but there are a few minor errors. For one, the part with Eric doesn't really fit in with the rest of the ...
Jun 16, 2016 -
Re: Your best friend
Not bad, but the poem needs several small adjustments. For one, the poem didn't really flow breaking the impact that some poems possess. For two, there are several lines that ...
Jun 16, 2016 -
Re: the beginning of my descent
Well, this certainly gets my sympathies, if this is real. For one, two the guy feels far to inferior to even be around his personal angel. For two, the guy ...
Jun 16, 2016 -
Re: Boy of my dreams
Well, this certainly up's the realistic scale, but there are several problems. For one, the statement "he was mine" is kind of offensive, in a relationship, both people should be ...
Jun 16, 2016 -
Re: A beautiful love story...
This is one of the more shallow stories I have read, but I can see potential. For one, the characters seem to be relatively shallow, try to give them more ...
Jun 16, 2016 -
Re: Run Back
Well, this is a interesting love letter. But, if this is the authors story, then I am afraid to say, whoever will not come running back. For one, whoever he ...
Jun 16, 2016 -
Re: Best friends forever
Eh, this is weird, and not the good kind of weird. For one, the characters seem to be impossibly bland and no sign of character development seems to exist. For ...
Jun 15, 2016 -
Re: Heights
Well, this seems to be a realistic depiction of what the 0.001% feel when they realize how much time they have been wasting with the trivial materials. For one, the ...
Jun 15, 2016 -
Re: flying out of a cannon is the best feeling
This is a entertaining view of what flying out a canon feels like. For one, there are realistic details displayed throughout the story. For two, the description of absolute bliss ...
Jun 15, 2016 -
Re: A Deal with the Devil
This is very interesting, good job with the story. For one, the characters seem realistic even thought this is a supernatural story. For two, what is presumed to be the ...
Jun 15, 2016 -
Re: Camping horror
In my opinion, this story is not bad, but far from scary. For one, the family dilemmas seem far too bland and only seem to be there to give frank ...
Jun 15, 2016