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MamaLama95

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Deleted 6

    This was.. tragically impressive. In a good way of course. Brilliant work.

    Tue Jul 12, 2011 5:07 am
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Hurricane.

    Thank you all for the reviews, I really appreciated every comment and criticism. I actually wrote this as an English assignment and did it in about forty minutes, so it's ...

    Tue Jul 12, 2011 5:01 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Dance In The Rain.

    There's no need to apologize - your review was great and it honestly did help. Welcome back, btw, and thanks for taking the time to look at my work. I ...

    Mon Jul 11, 2011 8:37 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Dance In The Rain.

    Thank you very much for the review - I appreciate every word.

    Mon Jul 11, 2011 6:30 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Crash.

    Thank you to everyone who reviewed - I can definitely see all my mistakes and it's nice to know that they can be fixed relatively quickly. Especially thanks to Toto, ...

    Sat Jul 02, 2011 11:11 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Trivialities

    Quite brilliant in fact. Good meter, you've got a grasp on punctuation and grammar, as well as vocabulary. Beautiful theme.

    Fri Jul 01, 2011 11:52 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Trivialities

    Quite brilliant in fact. Good meter, you've got a grasp on punctuation and grammar, as well as vocabulary. Beautiful theme.

    Fri Jul 01, 2011 11:52 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Moonlight

    Quite a beautiful poem actually. I like the wording and you do a great job making the metaphor flow very well. Keep working.

    Sun Jun 26, 2011 10:20 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: At Cambridge.

    I did notice the missing words, but I've already rectified that - I simply didn't want to upload the poem all over again. Thank you for all the comments, every ...

    Sun Jun 26, 2011 3:07 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Lead.

    Thank you for all the reviews, I appreciate every comment.

    Sun Jun 26, 2011 3:05 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Blood Stops Blue.

    I prefer to let the reader have whatever interpretation they wish to - I think that leaves the poem more unchained and open for anyone to relate to. Thank you ...

    Sun Jun 19, 2011 9:46 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re:

    Some grammatical errors and punctuation issues, but nothing a proof-read or some editing wouldn't fix. Good idea and presented in an appropriate psychotic manner, if a little underdeveloped.

    Sun Jun 19, 2011 9:36 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: In The Twist Of Fately Karma

    Refreshing, clear imagery and nice intertextuality. All in all, quite a decent poem, if lacking a little in a good finish - your last line was good, and powerful, but ...

    Sun Jun 19, 2011 9:35 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Your Ad Here

    Brilliant. Think it's a great poem with a wonderful message - well done.

    Sun Jun 19, 2011 11:48 am
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Cleaning Ladies.

    The topic was; Your story is about a maid in a dorm room fixing a hole punch.

    Wed Jun 15, 2011 8:32 pm


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