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This doesn't go anywhere. There is a very limited amount of interest that someone can afford to a description of ships. A story about ships fighting? Yes sure. An interesting ...

This seems to be mainly a nostalgic recollection. There isn't much in terms of emotive description. I mean, what is there in this that makes me care about this? Or ...

Abstract, thunderous creatures of tempestuous oceans and stinging fires intertwined To start off, here, I think your somewhat too wordy and I'm not so sure as to whether you're generalizing ...

It's original which for me practically ensures some level of enjoyment. Okay to start: two grammatical things. With a knife I can peal skin, remove veins, Should that be "peel". ...

I don't know. I'm not inspired or even really questioning. Entitled "Questions Arise!" I expected the questions which were to arise would either be more reader accessible or the poem ...

It was pretty and pretty good. I just felt it was lacking a really effective ending. ‘Come with me, love- come with me!’ " 'Come with me, love' " I ...

It's an interesting style and I like it. However, it comes across somewhat like an acrostic. A is for ... B is for ... Maybe mix it up a bit ...

It's nicely simple and what's said is nicely expressed but well, is much being said? It comes across as a simple retelling. I hurt you, I don't regret it, I've ...

I remember the day perfectly. I was sitting in my biology class, half listening to Mrs. Colons speak. Basically I was just writing song lyrics in the margin of my ...

An overlooked small seed at best, planted subtlety in my chest, slowly growing, I not knowing. I'd suggest some sort of stronger punctuation before "I not knowing", make it more ...

I agree with what Vernon said. Consider narrowing your focus here - you seem to be saying so much about so many things that, well, I get lost in what ...

I think you need to consider more carefully what it is that you are trying to convey in your poem. The first line for example, The night of 18 falling ...

The problem with having a poem completely rhyming and more so in rhyming couplets is that you are often forced to forsake meaning in the search for something that rhymes. ...

It was pretty good - some of the imagery was nice and the ending provided a good finish. swirling around me in a crescendo of greys and faded greens, lifting ...

It was a peaceful, silent, autumn day. The leaves were abandoning their homes and gently gliding to the ground. The birds were chirping as they left their nests to fly ...