MUCHO

Hmm...first of all I did like the poem as a work of poetry, though...maybe you should spend more time in America that isn't spent on "holiday" before you actually form ...

Pretty cool and simple-actually, pretty awesome, so simple but yet so deep. There's nothing to critique my friend! Except maybe try a different progression, I don't really understand how- "Doubts ...

Though I like this, there is an immediate flaw to it- the length and vocabulary. In MY opinion, when you are writing something about a subject like this, it must ...

Dude-you definitely don't suck at poetry, only you might want to add some emotion to this because it is kind of boring. The purpose of the lines at the end ...

So honest and heartfelt, there is nothing to be critiqued about this because I can tell it truly came from the soul and it has the effect that you must ...

Though I don't think it flows at all, it does have a great and heartfelt message-truly appropriate as a commemoration of an event, nothing more and nothing less. Great work-just ...

I can tell from this poem that I like you, without ever even meeting you, but I think some major changes are in order, especially with the rhyme and syllable ...

Bonjourno... "You threw me down All I can do is frown You were such a heavy burden Now my heart is broken Our friendship shattered Lives have been altered Tears ...

Interesting...promising, but I think it can definitely be stronger. Maybe instead of being so general, you can go more in depth and give some examples of the books you are ...

There is art in the style when compared to how and when you wrote this. The bland sentence structure (only commas and periods) expresses a sense of boredom and blankness ...

Love the concept, though your tone may be too strong. You wonder about the girl in the last stanza and just come to a conclusion about her, and I believe ...

I don't know if you were there that day, so please don't take this personally. As a work of fiction, there is some great imagery and stream-of-consciousness here; but I ...

Though the first one may have gone completely over my head (I hope so), I loved "Forest Fire" because it so perfectly captures the state of life of which we ...

Anyone with a soul has felt this way at one time or another, and that why this poem is great-to condense such a general feeling into four so concise lines ...

Extremely heartfelt, I got a great sense of what you were or still are feeling. I also liked the Deux es machina in the line about Taylor Swift, even though ...