The Progression

So true. That is true

I really loved the way the progressions made sense. When you made a statement, it easily worked into the other. I love this poem and it's simplicity. Keep up the good work!

Thanks for the comments means a lot.

yeah that part was a little fuzzy to me too. But in my eyes i saw it as when others doubt you, you see it as inspiration to prove them wrong. and that turns into your first beat, then yeah. That was what I thought.

Pretty cool and simple-actually, pretty awesome, so simple but yet so deep. There's nothing to critique my friend! Except maybe try a different progression, I don't really understand how-

"Doubts turn into insperation
Insperations turn into a beat
Beats turns into a rhythm

Ryhtms turn into a page"

But maybe I'm just not deep enough, nooooooooooooooo!

What a unique idea to write about! Very fun to read. Keep up these great ideas!

Excellent! I really have nothing else to say. This was so unique, that I don't find anything wrong with it.
Welcome to YWS and keep up the great work!
-Alex

Fast pace, and bare. It's a good outline of thoughts and I like the process, the only problem is that it has no form. No imagery, but that would be over bearing to this poem. But it could be used if you wrote a poem like this under another, as in, you can describe what you do while you go through process.

If you tried that, you could tie lots of other things, like beliefs you have, and other things unique to you. This would make it more relatable and more enjoyable because we'll have a more of a story to follow.
Just an idea...

Good luck, keep writing;
Silented1.

This is really amazing and expessive. You've got some great talent!!! welcome to YWS!!!!! glad to see yet another expressive poet. I agree with your idea to back up and start again. we, as humans, need to have a clean slate every once and a while to try and fix our errors. great job and again, welcome to our yws family!!!!