MRHILL92

The writing is clear, crisp and precise, but I think there could be just a little more detail here. Obviously, you've already received some feedback from everyone, but there's just ...

Loved it, and I can definitely relate to this. I too have often wondered where God was, and if he'd ever help me. I still don't know if God is ...

I don't read too much poety but this was pretty good. I definitely think you have what it takes to hit the big-time and don't let others stop you from ...

Great poem, I don't know much about them, but this one spoke to me. "you download your heart, in sans serif and sans self," That was a great line. It ...

One thing I would suggest is build up the tension more. He says he hates the wife, but how? Show us all more of that. He kills her, but I ...

"I moved quickly up the street" No. "I ran up the street." There you go. Or, "I marched up the street." Both are simple, and you can remove, "quickly." Because ...

I find myself at a loss of words. Everyone here has said everything that I wanted to write, except one: At first, I assumed this was also another little girl. ...

“I heard Ms. Violet coming. “ You’re telling me. Please show me. Or in this case, let me hear it. Ms. Violet’s footsteps drummed the hallway. Not the best, but ...

I can write a whole essay on this chapter. Though, I can't get into huge detail yet because I have more things I need to review. So, I'll just state ...

Again, everyone has said what I wanted to say. you say your cool but yet your not you call me ugly your hart deprived no one to blame only yourself ...

glovegg has said everything I wanted to and more. But my review is more about the content than the grammar mistakes. There are too many ellipses that aren't needed. Aside ...

As far as Pokemon fan-fiction goes, it's pretty good, but you need to check your spelling. I was going to copy and paste it, but there were almost too many. ...