Lycando

Hey there, here to review! So, I see what you have here as him having a flashback to the past from the present time. I like how you play around ...

Hey there, back to review the second and third chapter it seems! Alright, since Sylar has already done the nitpicking, I shall try to focus on other aspects. I notice ...

Hey there, back to review the second part! I really like where you're going with this, especially having the two of them being scared as hell about being caught. The ...

Hey there, here to review! First of all, when reading this, I kind of found the flow of sentences a little weird. Perhaps take note of where you place your ...

Hey there! Wow, I really liked the concept you got going here. Sure, mind readers are a common as hell character in many many plots. But having a kid grow ...

Hey there, I don't usually review poems but I'll give it my best shot! I like how you pair two things up and give them that sense of relationship and ...

Hey Zee! Since Demeter has already pinpointed the grammatical errors, I shall try to focus more on the story itself. To be honest, I found this piece a little stale. ...

Hey there! I really liked this piece of work, particularly how you conceptualized the value of thought. Overall the story was well written in addition to very vividly described scenes. ...

Hey there! Nice piece of work you have here, I particularly like how his mood changed the instance he laid his eyes on her, especially the part where you paint ...

Hey there! I didn't read the first part so I shall review based on this part alone! First off, it's pretty well done! It got my attention pretty quick, but ...

Oh my it's been long since I've written a review! Nevertheless, I'll try my best to critique this! :) "That saying always started the happy stories and as much as ...

Hey there! You requested me to review chapter 1 of this, but I found myself reading on! Usually long stories like these turn me off, but this was one of ...

Hey there! I'm back to review yet another chapter! I find that the storyline here to be changing quite drastically. Neon is finally opening up to her true self and ...

Hello there! Alright first off this is a really short chapter. You really need to add more stuff into this if you want it to be considered as an actual ...

Hey there! It's review day! I'm a little worn out but seeing as this is a prologue I shall do my best. Note that this may not be much of ...