Time

by summerlovee

Published January 22, 2015

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A day consists of 86400 seconds.

Every second is filled with countless chances, decisions and possibilities, in which ultimately only one will surface.

Out of the 86400 seconds, this was one of them.

My legs were willing to give up from all the running I had done in my stilettos, the rocky surface of the concrete floor did not assist my foot cramp. I took in a deep breath to control my breathing, that way I could run with a little dignity instead of puffing and sweating profusely.

As I pushed the door open, the wind chimes signalled my arrival and several heads turned to my direction. Taking small timid steps and ducking my head slightly, I made my way to the counter. Scanning through the bakery goods displayed on the side, my stomach instantly grumbled. The kind of noise that demands attention.

Behind the counter, Tony’s eyes flittered to my direction, filled with amusement.

“Well Sanny it seems like someone didn’t eat breakfast today.” He said teasingly.

I shot him an unamused look and went back to admiring the freshly baked muffins; the smell that wafted through the air was mouth watering. There was a banana muffin with blue icing, elegantly spread across the top; I knew it was the one. On the display shelf it was written that, that particular muffin was limited and it was the last one, the price was also reduced! It was perfect. I sighed in contentment even before taking a bite of it. These days I’m only happy when it’s something regarding food and I’m was in my early twenties.

At the corner of my eye, I saw a pale arm pointing at the muffin I already mentally bought and quickly snapped out of my thoughts. My mind took a few seconds to register what was happening and it pieced together really quickly, this person was going to take that muffin.

Tony was crouched down with a paper bag and reached to pick it up, I started panicking. That would’ve been the perfect start to a typical morning. As Tony placed the muffin into the brown bag and leaned over the counter, I subconsciously shouted out “Fuck!”

After a second, everyone registered what I had said and suddenly all eyes were on me, even the college student who was furiously typing on his laptop quickly looked around to see if everything was normal. Heat started rising to my cheeks and my stomach felt empty.

I nervously ran my fingers through my hair and shifted my eyes to my feet, just wishing for the awkward tension to diffuse. The clattering sounds of pots and pans in the bakery kitchen gave me the courage to hesitantly lift my head. Tony had his arm mid air with the bag still hanging and everyone else seemed to get back to their own activities.

“Woah, what was that?” Tony quizzically asked.

I shrugged and tried to seem indifferent about this whole situation. I slowly scanned the bakery to look busy and noticed that the paint was different for each section of the walls. I’ve never noticed that and I've been coming here every day for 3 years.

“Well Mia here is your muffin, it’s the last one so enjoy it.” He never sounded that cheery when he served me. Tony actually even sounded a bit flirty right now.

I wasn't sure if I wanted to see the person who possibly ruined my whole day. Maybe I can suggest extra money in exchange for that muffin, or buy another muffin and offer it.

“Thanks Tony, I’m sure it’s delicious.” I internally smirked because her tone was just friendly and hinted at nothing but friendship.I decided to quickly glance at this girl and she sounded my around my age.

My eyes darted to the side and I don’t really know what I was expecting.

Maybe I was expecting just an ordinary girl.

Maybe I was expecting someone that I find attractive but wouldn’t spare a second thought to.

But I wasn't expecting her.

Its funny how everything just seemed unrealistically blurred, but she was in the spotlight. It was like a bad romantic movie where the voice over says a cheesy line and out of nowhere wind gusts over and her hair perfectly blows with it.

But this was really happening and there was a breeze that slightly ruffled her hair due to someone opening the door. Inside my head seemed to have temporarily shut down while running faster than it ever has in the last 2 years.

Her bright blue eyes seemed to just hypnotize me, I knew I was staring too long and probably looked at an idiot. Drool may have trailed down my chin.

Everything I had found beautiful before seemed dull and frayed compared to her.

She turned around to leave and our eyes met. There was no instant sparkle like most stories claim, I was wide eyed and she looked really confused. In that brief time I had noticed that she bites her lips a lot and she fiddles whenever she’s doing something, right now her fingers were absentmindedly playing with the sleeve of her jacket. 

I heard the sound of someone clearing their throat but the sound of my thoughts drowned that noise out. I heard conversations around me but the sound of my heart pumping resonated through my ears.

“Mia...?” Tony waved the bag in front of her face.

She quickly dropped her gaze and flashed him a bright smile with muttered thanks, before dashing out of the bakery and forgetting about her brown bag. Tony looked at the muffin she left behind in confusion.

I blinked and turned around in a daze, it all seemed like a dream. But I remember more of the last 5 minutes in detail than I can of the last 2 years.

Living in New York is like a constant, tedious, monotonous cycle. You go to the same job you've been going to, you eat the same stale food that you can afford and your mouth curves upwards forming the same fake smile. The screeching of tires as taxis abruptly stop, are like nails piercing slowly into the brain. All the noise in this city can make you feel like either a child looking for guidance in a crowded shop or can make you beam as you gaze at the entire city.

I've been going through life dully, presenting my latest piece of work every week and getting praise from my boss. I've even been smoking the same cigarette brand for all this time. My eye was blind to everything that people would naturally smile about.

But she was different.

Her beauty was everything.

She was the cold December snow as it graciously fell,the moonlight reflected across a lake’s surface,the shining eyes of a child in the morning of Christmas,the warm wind that dances across the fields of barley. She was the deep river running over a path of stones, washing away every trace of who I was before I met her.

And I haven’t even spoken to her yet.

I stood still and my mind was racing. In that moment I felt like another person took control of my body and ran out of the bakery, ignoring the muffin that was placed on the counter.

I knew I had to find her. Time was always ticking and I wasn't going to let it breeze past me anymore. 

Comments & reviews · 3
scifyfantacywriter01 wrote a review Review · Jan 23, 2015

Ok, this is probably a dumb question but I have to ask, is the narrator a woman? I noticed at the top it says "stilettos" and the only stilettos I know of are stiletto heels. Anyway, its very cute. Cliché, but in a good way. The quick transition from irritated to adoration is nice, *Claps* I also like the ending, how he/she just runs out of the bakery, ignoring the muffin, to find this girl. Very romantic. I wouldn't have put this under comedy though, yeah it has a few funny lines and such but its far closer to a romance but that's an issue for you to decide on. I couldn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes, *claps again* All in all this ranks a 10 on the cute-o-meter :D Scify out!

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Lycando
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Lycando wrote a review Review · Jan 23, 2015

Hey there! Nice piece of work you have here, I particularly like how his mood changed the instance he laid his eyes on her, especially the part where you paint the cliched picture of the gust blowing her hair. When you started off, your character seemed very irritable and snappy, as though the world was against him.

But then after his encounter with Mia, he seems to have changed his outlook on her totally. Perhaps a certain something she emanated took over him, but I think it would have been more interesting to see him debating with his irritable side, like an inner conflict. Would have spiced his character up a little more, but that's just my take on this.

Hope this review was helpful!

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GuyLathamzim wrote a review Review · Jan 23, 2015

Very touching Meet cute. The characters seem well developed and personalised allowing the reader to follow without too much introspection. Which is very important. there are quite a few grammatical errors though. Although im quite sure they would have been picked up if a brief edit had been done.
One of the better romance openings iv read on this site, but there is always room for improvement. I have found that when writing romance, due to there being quite a uniform formula that writers tend to follow. i.e. meet cute leads to pursuit which leads to love. try mixing it up a bit, its the best way to come up with a more unique story that might stand out from others. But the air or vibe of the setting is great, the frantic, fast paced New Yorker feel makes for very pleasant reading and I think you've excelled in that aspect.



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