Hey there!
It's review day! I'm a little worn out but seeing as this is a prologue I shall do my best. Note that this may not be much of an in depth critique but I'll try!
I'm personally a fan of science fiction stories, especially futuristic ones. Your type of story just gets me hooked and I'm all like "I want to keep reading this".
What is essentially here is the introduction of these two different groups and their viewpoints on human enhancements. We've seen many stories like this, and as cliche as the starting may seem, the actual plot might turn out to be quite original, depending on how you develop it. What I can see from here though is the cliche part, no doubt though it keeps me hooked.
I'm seeing this as a story that will further develop from this special individual and how he is different from the others. I'm rather pleased that you didn't reveal too much about him here, since it's only the prologue. However what could have been improved on was the back story. Sure you give a pretty good explanation of what the situation is, but what are the actual problems that both sides are experiencing. You say they fight, but is it an actual war or just prejudice against each other. Somehow I feel that letting these details for a prologue is pretty essential, since you won't want to throw in random bits of information during the future chapters.
Overall a good start to the novel, and I hope the further chapters will entice me just as much! Hope my review, even though it wasn't much, did help!
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