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Re: Only Acting
This is genuinely an impressive piece, the way you portrayed the steady insanity. It was an interesting change from baseline insanity and anxiety (from the affirmations this is what I ...
Mar 16, 2025 -
Re: The Staircase: Leading to Archaic Era (Part 1)
This was a very well-written work! the vivid imagery brought me into the dream. It was a wonderful idea to use an ancient biosphere, and the description of it was ...
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Re: The Loudest Silence
This is so sad because I know just how it feels, amazing job with the relatability. I love how it seems vague but also you threw in some phrases like ...
Mar 24, 2024 -
Re: Shadow's Rising {Wing 1} Chapter 7
This was a really good chapter, it featured a large amount of descriptive detail along with incredible visuals. I saw that there could be the possibility of Simon finding Shadow ...
Mar 23, 2024 -
Re: Shadow's Rising {Wing 1} Chapter 6
Delightful chapter, it was a very emotional one at that. The thought of losing a brother is hard to portray in writing, but you seemed to have done a good ...
Mar 21, 2024 -
Re: ​Your trauma made you stronger.
This is an amazing poem, so heartfelt. I'm sorry about whatever happened to you. The wording in this is good, there is a lot of repetition of phrases. This poem ...
Mar 21, 2024 -
Re: Shadow's Rising {Wing 1} Chapter 5
short review this time. Initial reaction to the magic test, an impressive feat of skill shown by the Lt. Gavin. I believe that Jared could have put more power into ...
Mar 20, 2024 -
Re: Shadow's Rising {Wing 1} Chapter 4
Impressive chapter, the fighting scene was incredible. I'm very impressed with the details put into writing this one. The fight was an astonishing one with the fact that a commoner ...
Mar 20, 2024 -
Re: Shadow's Rising {Wing 1} Chapter 3
Shorter review this time, sorry. Overall chapter looks pretty good, I was hooked reading about the challenges. there was a great description of everything, it flowed very well. Interested in ...
Mar 20, 2024 -
Re: Shadow's Rising {Wing 1} Chapter 2
Okay, to start off good job on the flow of writing, amazing that there is a new character. Interesting choice to make a noble who was not mean or self-centered. ...
Mar 20, 2024 -
Re: Shadow's Rising {Wing 1} Chapter 1
I'm just going to start off with, wow, very impressive. This piece is a great 1st chapter for a bit of world-building. The amount of emotion that is put into ...
Mar 20, 2024 -
Re: Flightless: Chapter 2
This chapter is very emotionally heavy, the pain and fear, its impressive. The knowledge that this is not the first time something like this happens just makes it that much ...
Mar 19, 2024 -
Re: Flightless: Chapter 1
This is an incredibly well-written chapter, I look forward to the continuation of this story. It has a depth to it about being ostracized from any group, hopefully, it's not ...
Mar 14, 2024
