Lozrent

Hey, lozrent here for a little review. First, to start of this is a really well made poem. One of the best I’ve read online. My first recommendation though, simply ...

Heya here to do a little review for you, first of all really cool topic. It’s something I haven’t really thought of that much before but I realize myself that ...

Hey, random guy here for a review (I see a lot of people starting like this and i want to be as fancy as them so I shall too) Just ...

Alright ive looked through about the first quarter of it(its really long) and ive put all the edits i think you should make in bracets where you should place them ...

Alright I’ll go through this going downwards- first of all shotgun is one word. I would try to avoid using words like thru like you did here "bullets rip thru" ...

This is a really well written poem, great rhyme scheme you’ve gotten in there and at a few parts where you seemed to use forced rhyme it still sort of ...

hey, this is the first poem ive read about any kind of greek mythology and ive got to say, as a mythology enthusiast i love it :) but i will ...

hey, nice poem :D first of all i love that you have a proper rhyme scheme something which tends to almost always make poems a lot better, you also remembered ...

This is a really nice story you’ve created here, I was very captivated for the first few stanzas but here you are making it way too long. My advice would ...

Amazing piece of literature you've written here, the way you bend and use language to make such an impact is really fantastic. I have read very few poems on war ...

This has got to be the most amazing piece of literature I’ve ever read by someone who isn’t a published author. The way you use the emotion in your characters ...

ok i'm just gonna start it off like this, this is beautiful. the way you use language, especially in the first few stanzas is amazing, it really brings forth emotion, ...