Liz

Mmm, nice. It's good to read something original. It's almost flimsy, but I guess in some ways that adds to the effect. But it’s been 365 days too much Too ...

Nice. Pretty. In some ways I felt like it was a bit over the top, in parts. The amber sun sinks into gilded hills. The land heaves a weary sigh. ...

Rightio. First of all, would you say this is a common, universal feeling of yours, to be betrayed and hurt by someone and to feel like giving up? Yes? Well, ...

Good ideas,but I think they could be great ideas if you expressed them more poetically. The syntax is very journal-entry-style, and a lot of the suggestions gadi made would make ...

OK, this could do with much fixing up. First of all, as Via said, I think it would be much more interesting if you didnt start each line with the ...

I like the fragmented nature of this piece. The first three lines were the best. I felt like it rambled to a point, and the fact that it was all ...

Overall nice, though I didnt really like the second one. Found it a bit unoriginal and it was kind of static. His writhing thought from mouth I found that a ...

Nice. Great idea. I did find it was overloaded with adjectives, for example: Fair locks flowed Down her slender back. This just weakened the poem for me. The first stanza ...

Very beautiful and truthful. Your rhyming is also appropriate and adds a lot to the poem with few exceptions. I did not recognize this Broadway star. Her eyes did not ...

Nice idea, but I think it could be better put-together. No wonder seeing as your just "scribbled it down during class"! I congratulate you for that. Ok. Love the first ...

Pretty. Generally I thought your rhyme-scheme worked, and that's really good, since I find rhyming rarely works in amateur poetry. SO good job. I knew a pearl lay on the ...

Nice. A few places I found were a bit choppy, but overall I liked it. That winter weather Is here? That's a bit awkward, I'd say scrap the "weather" part. ...

It sounds more like a song, yeah. I think you could do some things to make it more poetic, though. Firstly, nit-picking Kiss me once; hurt me twice. Should be ...

Very nice. Very pretty. Some of the punctuation confused the meaning, I think. Naturally, life’s hardly All we rapture for And even though love blossoms From your stars dribbling down ...

Very nice use of aural imagery in here. I can not only see everything happening but hear it too. Very effective. I also liked your assonance in the second line, ...