Hey!
This was nicely done. i actual enjoyed your opening "do you know how it feels", I thought it gave us some questioning.
Keep up the great work!!
Kelsi =)
P.S: I know how it feels.
Do you know how it feels,
To get used and lead on,
To find someone you like so much
And to fall so far.
To get your heart ripped out as if it don’t belong.
To think that love isn’t for you,
And To know that how much you try
You will fall even harder the next time.
To just want to give up,
But know you can’t.
You go on and on
Just trying to prove your theory wrong
And yet every time you get close
It all falls apart.
Hey!
This was nicely done. i actual enjoyed your opening "do you know how it feels", I thought it gave us some questioning.
Keep up the great work!!
Kelsi =)
P.S: I know how it feels.
I did like the structure of this poem, however it did lake content and personality.
A few little changes could be made. For example:
To get your heart ripped out as if it don’t belong.
Do you know how it feels
Rightio. First of all, would you say this is a common, universal feeling of yours, to be betrayed and hurt by someone and to feel like giving up? Yes? Well, you're right. So doesn't that make you feel like you need to tell your. particular. story? I feel like that too. I feel like I want to know what you're feeling, your poem did that much to me. But I just didn't get it.
Do you know how it feels,
To get used and lead on,
To find someone you like so much
And to fall so far.
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