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As simplistic as this is, I like it, and the last two line serve as a good clincher. Don't be so self-critical; it's actually great. Is it the work of ...

I have two chief things to say: first, the vagueness is bothersome, but your use of imagery is exciting. I have always despised vagueness; thus it's no criticism to you ...

I like it so far, but don't feel that there is really enough here. Understandably, you're probably still working out in your own mind what you want to say (I ...

Well, what an interest catcher! I almost feel as though it should be part of a book because it really draws my attention, as a reader. There were no boring ...

First, I think this journal entry was incredibly well-written as far as its order is concerned. You conveyed your story easily and supplemented it with some key background. (Although there ...

I had to read this twice to form a good opinion, but now that I have, I commend you for this chapter. I'm eager to see the others and find ...

Oh my gosh! What a chapter, I love it! There's amazingly realistic dialogue, depth to the characters, and some intriguing background to Qui. It's all rather intriguing. I did not ...

I must say, this whole chapter has effective descriptions and an interesting story, especially with the idea of a vampire who is upset by his own behavior. What a statement!--the ...

Interesting! I like this much though I didn't read any of the other chapters. I don't know exactly what happened here, but it was quite alluring. You have included all ...

Wow, what a satire, ThirdBetrayle! What you have written truly reminds me of human nature. We are all fallible, incomplete creatures; on our own, we destroy each other. Your poem ...

I'm glad I found this piece because I enjoy it in spite of some negative points. First, Jazai sounds like an interesting character and an intelligent, resourceful person; but your ...

Though I think there are a few things wrong with this poem, it's truly quite good. As a writer, you've done a good job of making certain lines flow beautifully ...

I like how this poem began, but this has a rather awkward ending. The use of the second person makes it sound as though you're talking to the reader, but ...

Wow! I love this, but do not understand it. It is quirky and humorous, and it kept me interested to the very end. Bravo! However, there are a few problems ...

Although this is a well-written poem, what is being said--regardless of how it was written—is detestable. In my opinion, the poem has three key traits: being disturbing and being confusing ...