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Re: Change
This is beautifully clever! The truth is, it's just about flawless; it's awesome! I cannot stress that enough. Very well done,liv1997! Your work here feels very human and honest. I ...
Jun 26, 2015 -
Re: Leaders. -> feed back would be great :)
Everyone has the attributes and qualities to be a leader? I see what you're saying, but you should probably word it as, "Does everyone have the attributes and qualities to ...
Jun 26, 2015 -
Re: Broken Houses
What a poem! My, I guess the writer's block stopped. Anyway, this is awesome! Every line is well worded. At the start, I didn't understand where it was all going. ...
Apr 22, 2015 -
Re: Lady Oh Lady
Wow! This poem is thoroughly enjoyable. It typifies the thought of being short and sweet. It has not only powerful imagery and description but also a warm, informal style. I'm ...
Apr 22, 2015 -
Re: Binding Blood - Chapter 1
Ooh, ah, ooh! You continue to impress, my friend. I quite enjoyed this first chapter. Having read the fourth chapter before this, I thought that Dannel would gain the imp, ...
Dec 29, 2014 -
Re: Binding Blood - Chapter 4
This is amazing! Talk about originality, and I didn't even read the other chapters! Well done, BiscuitsBatchAvoy. I can't really break this down much, but I'll try. I tell you, ...
Dec 29, 2014 -
Re: The Veil - Chapter 22 Part 2
What can I say? I found myself annoyed at certain points (I've said this before, but, oh, it's important.) by the lack of description of the environment; and at other ...
Dec 28, 2014 -
Re: The Veil - Chapter 22
I can't quite tell what is going on, but that is because I haven't been reading it. To me, it's always seemed that you didn't really describe the environment enough ...
Dec 28, 2014 -
Re: TFoA - Chapter 15
I really don't have much to tell you since this is so short, but my overall impression was good. You're right: it is somewhat boring, but at points in books, ...
Dec 28, 2014 -
Re: Eden
I liked this; there is good wording which illustrates reverence for God (as in "my undeserving soul") and your hope in life after death. I don't know if "Eden" is ...
Dec 28, 2014 -
Re: We You and I
Oh, my bones! How has no one given you the praise this deserves! Sonnets are incredibly hard to write. (At least, I think they are; I have tried to write ...
Dec 28, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 2- Weird/Creepy
Well done! Again, that realistic dialogue is present, making the story always more tangible. Furthermore, I liked how you had everything put together: each event flowed very naturally into the ...
Dec 28, 2014 -
Re: d
You wrote this at 11? Well done! Much praise thou deservest, for I like it. You used colorful words to describe your mother; you referenced several old sayings, which makes ...
Dec 27, 2014 -
Re: The Uncanny
I must say, you have left me almost speechless. This was certainly interesting; humor, realistic dialogue, personality--all of that was here. I appreciate your narrator's humanity. In fact, everything
Dec 27, 2014 -
Re: the look in their eyes
Though I am about to be negative, I tell you I do rather like this. However, the poem is unbearably uninformative. What are you saying here? Children change. Yes, most ...
Dec 27, 2014
