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  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: Tears She Cries

    This is great. There is only a few typo's that need to be fixed. The first thing is that this line: "There are no answers you can only hide." It ...

    Dec 17, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Lyrical Re: I Want To Fall In Love With a Writer

    Oh my, I absolutely love this. I really do, Honestly, I couldn't find anything wrong with it. It flowed well, and it sounded amazing out loud. My favorite stanza by ...

    Dec 17, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: Just Another Shadow

    Hey there, first off I'd like to say I enjoyed this. Really, I mean it. "I can feel myself fading- Every single piece of me." You start off great, and ...

    Dec 16, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: The Terrifying Camps; Memories of a Dead Man

    This was a very good poem, and it's not on the usual topic. And I like that. There was only one thing wrong. And it was just a typo. In ...

    Apr 29, 2013
  • Lyrics » Fantasy, Other Re: Come with me

    Hey there arianaSarroyo, I'm going to start this by saying that I really liked this, it was cute, and you could tell what it was trying to express. That and ...

    Apr 6, 2013
  • Lyrics » Romantic, Realistic Re: For You

    Hello Carlito, This is going to be a short review. First off, is this suppose to be a song? If it is, then it needs a little work to make ...

    Apr 6, 2013
  • Lyrics » Romantic, Realistic Re: Something About You

    I honestly loved this! I just had one problem really. The verse, which i think it is. So I lied there is another thing. Sounded really choppy and it disrupted ...

    Mar 31, 2013
  • Lyrics » Realistic, Romantic Re: I Am Here

    Hey there Stori, I decided to review your song, obviously. I think it would be better with a rhythm, that's the first thing I'm going to suggest. Though I'm sorry ...

    Mar 31, 2013
  • Poetry » Spiritual, General Re: A Visual Spectacular

    Hey I honestly enjoyed your poem. It reminded me of a fantasy book I read awhile ago. And i just adore how you used certain word here, like hyptonic, and ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Lyrics » Lyrical, General Re: Revenge

    This was really good. I enjoyed it. I only had one problem. You have your chorus labeled but that is it. And I can see you have and intro. You ...

    Feb 11, 2013
  • Lyrics » Lyrical, General Re: Falling Forever

    It was really good. The only problem I had with this, Is that you didn't label anything else but the chorus. You have an intro, your verses and a coda/outro. ...

    Feb 11, 2013
  • Lyrics » Romantic, Narrative Re: Second chance

    It's really good. There was really one thing that really bothered me. I don't want to repeat whats already been said, so that leaves one thing. You only label the ...

    Feb 11, 2013
  • Lyrics » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Rescue Me

    This was pretty good. There was only a few things that need a little work. One of them is when you get to the chorus, you have things bunched up, ...

    Feb 11, 2013


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