Liaya

Wow.... So, I started reading this and I thought "I don't understand..." Then I realized I didn't care, because that was part of what made it so alluring. There's a ...

I really liked this! I love the way you make me want to know more about the "me" in the poem. It's beautifully written. I especially love that you switched ...

Wow, this is a beautiful description. It's almost...too perfect. It makes me want to know more about the world it's set in. I love the way you portray the characters ...

This is beautiful. I agree that there could be some more imagery to make it slightly more original (and you're kind of overworking the commas) but it's really lovely--don't change ...

This is beautiful. I think it's slightly rough around the edges, but previous reviewers have caught everything I think you ought to look at. And I definitely wouldn't want you ...

I really like this; it's clever, it flows well, and it has some wonderful imagery! It's a little strange, too, so it makes me think about all the things it ...

Haha, this is great. I love the conversation (argument) going on between you and your characters. I've had some pretty realistic arguments with mine, too! You address a lot of ...

Okay, so I'm going to write this review as I read so I can be sure to catch everything, okay? Here goes! Okay, the lines "Was it a image that ...

Wow. This is...a little disturbing, to be honest. But I guess it is based off of a nightmare, right? That being said, well done! This is an incredibly vivid description ...

Wow. No, really, wow. I'm amazed. For being such a rude narrator, this was incredible. I guess it was probably your bluntness that made me want to keep reading anyway. ...

This is really well done. It's expressive, it flows beautifully, it gets its meaning across, and everything works together great. I especially love your lines, "You give, not take,/You'll suffer ...

Okay, I really like this so far. It's got some power to it. It doesn't specify exactly what you're talking about, but because of that it invokes memories of whatever ...

This is a really fun poem! Your flow and rhythm are all good and the words are a clever illustration of writing. I enjoy the way you end it, too, ...

Haha, I wouldn't call this "sweet," just "tragic," because it most certainly is tragic. Your style is great and you manage to paint a very vivid picture of this girl's ...

Hey, good job. I like your writing and the characters and the idea...I do think your paragraphs tend to wax longer than necessary. I'd suggest going through and splitting them ...