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Thank you very much!

Arion: I totally understand what you are saying about the characters needing to be deeply in love.. and I tried to imply that they are very much in love. I ...

I didn't actually state this but I was sort-of thinking that this may be the beginning of a longer peice.. except I wanted to try out a little of it ...

Yes, I would call it a free verse.

Thank you so much! I'm going to work on editing this one..

Thank you so much! I had never even looked at it from that point of view, ha.

Thank you very much!

Thank you so much! I definitely took your suggestions into consideration!

Thank you very much! I have to admit that I look at what I wrote and it screams "song lyrics", but I greatly appreciate the feedback!

No one else??

Thank you ever so much.. but I don't know how to get the spaces to be what they originally were before I pasted? It screwed everything up. = (

All comments are appreciated, and sorry for my little 'rant' at the beginning of the piece.. I was half kidding and partially trying to get a point across. I loveeee ...

I made a few of the corrections, I seriously appreciate every comment. Thanks again!

Thank you SO much for the comments!

Hey, thanks for the comment! Anyways, for "Mirror", I'm trying to say that she is beautiful.. but she doesn't realize it, because she is preoccupied with all of the 'flaws' ...