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This piece is really beautiful. It easily shows the relationship between the princess and the Prince. You used a wide range of vocabulary and you didn't linger too long long ...

To start of I'm going to start on the cons- or a con - or more likely something you can change. "My love is for him, Is my everything." You ...

I love the use of description and I can easily imagine everything you've said. "As Well." No need to include a capital letter on well. At the beginning it starts ...

Try and break up the paragraphs more; make them shorter. For someone like me, big paragraphs put me off, but I still read it though. Honest, I did. " have ...

Wow, that's truly amazing! I could never write a poem in French! (after reading the English translation) I found the poem very well written. It keeps the reader hooked and ...

I love comics! I noticed on the first line there's a full stop, then the first word after doesn't have a capital letter. Also leave a space after the full ...

I love this story! It's very well written and keeps the reader hooked into the story. I love the idea of the story and everything about it. You used a ...

Nothing too serious, but I noticed in chapter 1 you said was for one character and is for another character, which doesn't make much sense, as you are using past ...

I noticed a few spelling mistakes, such as exhausted is missing the h and enormous is missing an o. I love the way you used a different form of speech ...

Wow, that was really powerful and I could definitely feel the emotion of this person. There is nothing really I could find wrong with this. It's so beautifully told through ...

The name of this piece is called "I, for all men." But the first line you have missed out the comma (to be honest it doesn't matter that much). The ...

First I'll, unfortunately, start of with the cons. On the first line, "and upon my eyes, darkness spread." You could've said, " Upon my eyes, darkness spreads." If you can ...

Wow, this is an amazing piece. I loved how you were counting, as you were describing what was going on AND it rhymed! I can't find anything wrong with this. ...

Honestly, I feel sorry for J. Good use in punctuation and vocabulary. I'm not just saying that, it's better than mine. Even if it was just the first part ,it ...

Great lyrics, as I read it I could feel a beat coming on. Lol. Most songs ,especially this one, express people's emotions and tell stories. They can also show people's ...