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Straight from the first line, I was instantly hooked into the story. The scene of what was going on came clear into my mind. You used a good range of ...

“Where do you think you’re going?” spat a sweet voice. It was the young girl who had welcomed Braxton. He turned to her, noticing a sneer pasted on her face. ...

"The bus blew to pieces. Just before the blast, the diamond erected a barrier around Lexi and John. Protecting them from the blast." "They laid on the sidewalk. Their body ...

This was very interesting and I instantly became hooked. You didn't linger too long in this chapter and it was very imaginative. There were some hints of a romance or ...

Hi LLZ here for a quick review for the day ( number 20). I love this poem, it's been told beautifully. I can imagine the tale being told. It's so ...

It's so beautiful and well written. Though it's short it tells a story, that I can easily imagine in my head, as I read every line. "Cause I never wanted ...

Hi, LLZ here for a review for the day. "Maria,, and Matthew " an easy fix. "loud metallic crash"- could add a comma between loud and metallic. "Her blue speckled ...

Wow, that's amazing. The repetition was affective in this piece and I liked how every second and fourth line rhymed with each other. Making it something hard to forget, as ...

Hi, LLZ here for a short review for the day! This was very powerful and came across more poetic than a short narrative piece. It seems naturally written and gives ...

Hi, LLZ, here, on a quick review for the day. The lyrics are great, but it's hard to think of a tune to go with it. Is it supposed to ...

The story goes straight into the action. You don't linger on in any places, you just go straight in. It starts of without an introduction, which is great in its ...

I love this poem. It's so beautiful, I can easily imagine what is going on. The description/ imagery is well written and I love every single line of the poem. ...

I love how you compared yourself to a puzzle, mentioning the cracks. I liked that part, very original-in a good way. It would've been better to make it longer. It ...

Wow, that was a very good piece. It seemed natural and not something forced to be written. K could really feel the emotion. The description was great and powerful. Though ...

Kate, strangely enough, reminds me of Annabeth from 'Percy Jackson.' The blonde hair and the grey. Any who, the beginning was very good, I became instantly hooked, making me want ...