Leja

This is a book for the hopeless romantic in all of us (myself included). It's definitely not the best-written book I've ever read, but after I finished it, I turned ...

I liked the whole thing! Because it rhymes, I picture a child telling this story, like when a four year old walks into the kitchen while company's there, and recites ...

My only complaint would be too many adjectives, especially in the second stanza. Also, it might involve the reader more if you told not only what someone watching the little ...

Try breaking up the text a bit more... I noticed that there was a space between two larger blocks of text; if you're trying to make chapters, maybe separate those ...

I think this story is very well written; there isn't much there that isn't necessary. The only thing I would change would be to take out the final repetition of ...

One of the first things I'd reccomend would be to space things out a little more. I can see why some lines would be left as full sentences (such as ...

I liked the rhyme scheme, especially when it fits so well with your word choice; I thought it gave a sense of weightlessness in the first part, and in the ...

I liked the description, especially the bit about sand. I don't know if this was purposeful or not, but the word "I" is inconsistantly capitalized, so just pointing that out. ...

I like the idea for the syllabal count, but I'm not quite sure it has the desired effect because I could only really appreciate it after I read the note ...

This might be a strange way to begin a review, but this poem just seemed so self-contained. What I mean by this is that no additional content is needed to ...

I think this is a nice little poem. I liked the first half especially: they made me feel like I was in a room where the walls were closing in. ...

I happened to like the informal language; when a person gets tired (whether it be of a situation or in general) they often tend to speak or act in a ...

I like the idea you have, but you haven't given much description about where Drake and Vanessa are, so I'm a little confused; paragraph spacing would be helpful as well. ...

This made me laugh. Alot. I especially liked the part about "sweet inspiration" although you can totally daydream during gym class. The more often you get hit in the head ...

I'm going to have to side with hekategirl; I need the motivation to read LOTR. However, I have been reading Harry Potter since who knows when. I keep borrowing LOTR ...