Leja

That's a really cool idea for a contest :D I like how in the beginning, "And I went to the park" gets its own line. Nicely effective ^_^ I headed ...

I see how this could be intended as more of a prose-poem (and it's almost there!), but the way it's structured makes it really more of a flash fiction piece. ...

I like the pointed summary in the beginning stanza. After that though, the one-line/one-sentence stanzas got a bit on my nerves. The last stanza (excluding the last line) was a ...

After reading this poem, the biggest question I have is "why do you need love to succeed?" Sorry if that sounds slightly cynical; it's not a general life question, just ...

The idea of giving someone your heart is so very overdone. This is not a new take on that situation, but a reiteration of what everyone already knows, that there'll ...

This poem was severely written to rhyme and it shows. As such, the rhythm is halting and makes things sound childlike. The other thing is that this is such a ...

Silver hair on silver dress, Midnight eyes that stare, Snow soft skin, and petal lips, A heart and hard as stone. With a smile that chills the heart, With hatred ...

None of these lines seem to connect from one to the next; it sounds like lines of cliches strung together and because of that, the poem as a whole ceases ...

A quick note: having a poll preface a literary work is not the best way to begin (they're better for non-literary things ^_^). I don't think that the repetition does ...

It was a little too rhyme-y for me, and because of that, I didn't find it making a lot of sense. There's not a lot that I found particularly new ...

The "you" seems heavily accented, almost spat out. This is a good thing, since there's obviously anger directed at this "you", but it's used so often that it starts to ...

Look especially at the first stanza. It seems like a string of lines, loosly connected, rather than a unified image. The "you" in the second stanza is a little jarring, ...

Please keep discussion in this forum to reviews of the Twilight book series. Additional discussion about the movie and all other facets of the series can be continued in the ...

A few formatting things: - A line of all capitals is really very unnecessary, especially when it is bold as well. The words should be strong enough in themselves, without ...

I actually saw the shape of this poem in two ways. The first, before I even read it or the note before it, I was just a square block of ...