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You'll undersatnd why the dream(s) is necessary once you continue reading, and I'll be sure to take on your adjective advice. I know dreams are quite cliche, trust me I ...

Thank you, very kind words :)

Wow, that means a lot :) Thank you so much for this kind review.

I do agree, it is quite vague, i apologise. I might go back and fix it up, however, in the meantime the poem is meant focus on our obsession with ...

Hmmm "a morally ignorant man destroyed him"? or "some filth of a human bludgeoned him". I dunno, hope that helped or inspired you to come up with a line.

Thank you so much!! :)

Wow, those were some kind words. Thanks so much!

Hi! Very dry and bare....but I like it ;) You played with the idea of emptiness and helpless hope well. You can sure as hell nail a damn good poem! ...

hey man, I adored this. it was such an original, well expressed piece of work. well done. my only criticism, is that the last two lines were unnecessary.

I actually agree about the tis. Honestly? I just typed it cos i couln't be bothered typing it is. Haha. That's how lazy I am.

What a beautiful poem to have written. It is so symbolic of the desperation people have to go with their deceased loved ones to heaven, where all can be united ...

No worries, by the way, beside a few little things to fix, you could really do well writing in this style. :)

Thanks, Im glad you understood what I meant :) And I really appreciate the feedback.

Hey RedApril29th, I never intended to potentially harm those 'young girls' who might feel insecure about their weight. I'm a young girl myself and I didn't feel as if the ...

Wow, you need to go pro because this is expert stuff. I legitimately have no criticism for this piece. I can only say I worship you for your poetic prowess.