Now and Waiting

Hello, Becca!

I really like this, and definitely see you in it, you and your busy, non-sleeping self.

I've read over this a few times now, because it's really interesting. It has kind of an anxious feeling, and a touch of mysteriousness to it, yet at the same time it's very calming with it's neat organization. It's a little wordy, but it works, because I feel like you made a very personal, person to person conversation within this poem. It made me stop and wonder about things going on with me. I loved the third stanza because it's so true. Talk is cheap, that's what it made me think of. I really love that, because it's kind of jarring, because reading that makes one see that they do the same thing, hand out empty meaningless words. All of this was really thought-provoking to a great level.

I do have a few little suggestions to offer.

1) You start many lines with "but", "because", or "and". It's just vaguely unaesthetic to see that many when running your eyes along the margin. None of them are the starts of sentences, which is good, but they're still the starts of lines. It's a little thing to do that can put them to a better effect. If you end lines with those types of words, it makes the reader really excited to read on and find out what. It creates this sort of tension within the poem that makes it more exciting.

The rest are all tiny things, I promise XD
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Another day it’s realization

This is a great poem! The way you began the poem was very eye catching and introduced of the series of events you managed to eloquently consolidate into poetry! Your choice of words and wordplay was nicely chosen, the poem itself nicely put together.

You well-organized your verses accordingly. By reading this, I could tell how organized this was put together and it was an enjoyable poem.

[quote]I can’t seem to grasp.
But if I wait, maybe I will.

I think you have just popped the bubble surrounding writer's block and it makes total sense the way you have written this.
Especially, I liked this part: 'Last week it was for sleep
Because I’d been so long without.
What I craved most
Was a moment with eyes closed
And mind emptied of insomnia. ' cause it shows the struggle of the writer accurately.
I don't know how long you've been writing before but you have a great understanding of this art and you write about it really well.

Hi!

Very dry and bare....but I like it You played with the idea of emptiness and helpless hope well. You can sure as hell nail a damn good poem! The quantity is impressive, as well as the quality. Excellent work there friend, keep up the good work

Legy.

Hi! Congrats, you'll be my first ever review.
I liked your poem, it seems very relatable and i'm sure we've all been in situations similar to yours. Of course, I think a very interesting and important (But not always necessary) part of a poem is having it relatable to other people, because they're feel for the poem more and they'll be able to understand the emotions you felt as you wrote this poem.
Keep on it up and have a good day.

Hey there! Purple here to give you a (small) review! Let's get started.

I really sympathize with the concept of numbness and waiting for it to pass or get better in one way or another. It's a very relatable subject with enough simplicity that you have room to twist it around and make it dark and beautiful. I like this a lot, with only one complaint/suggestion. I noticed you capitalized and that seems to be one of my common pet peeves lately. Sometimes doing that to every single line makes the punctuation seem invisible, as if every line is a sentence. I would just suggest un-capitalizing some of the words after lines that ended with a comma since that's still part of the same sentence. That's it! Keep writing and have a nice night!
~Purple