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Re: white gold // a purity previously unknown
Hey darlin!
Jan 17, 2016 -
Re: Sherbet Lemons: Chapter 1
Hi darling So I get what you're doing here, making it all disjointed and jumpy because everyone's all stressed out and stuff-- but I'm not quite sure it's effective. It ...
Jan 2, 2016 -
Re: Deleted 61
second promised review, love! "watch the grass es " I'd make it just grass. "playing with a fire truck long abandoned" IDK WHY but for some reason I really really ...
Nov 9, 2015 -
Re: Deleted 62
Hello darling. Here to as promised
Nov 9, 2015 -
Re: Deleted 60
hi darling so like i told you last night this might be my favorite lumi poem. And it's not because it's perfect and there are no mistakes but because of ...
Oct 15, 2015 -
Re: Deleted 59
Hi darling I noticed you're still in the green room like I am so I thought I'd pop by and give my thoughts. I love this. My favorite part is ...
Oct 10, 2015 -
Re: I did it for you
Let's dance, sugar
Sep 19, 2015 -
Re: Amphitheater.
So I've always loved the idea of writing about amphitheaters and gladiators in my poetry. I've even tried it several times and it's never really worked for me-- so I ...
Sep 3, 2015 -
Re: Spelling
Hello! This is cute! So I'm obviously not going to correct the spelling mistakes because I assume they were completely intentional. Which I totally respect. This poem is cute and ...
Sep 3, 2015 -
Re: cracked skin
hey babe! I liked this. Until like stanza three, where it become a little overwrought and too much for my taste. So my review is mostly going to be able ...
Aug 25, 2015 -
Re: this is how you're beautiful, dearest delia
Hello! My name is Spark :) Wow, this is a long poem. I love it, and I love the premise behind it, but it's so incredibly long winded, that I ...
Jun 13, 2015 -
Re: Are we out of the woods yet?
Okay so I really want to like this. I like the topic, but it's completely riddled with simple errors. Which is actually really surprising considering I've been reading your work ...
Jun 13, 2015 -
Re: Ignorance is bliss
Hi darling. Let's jam. a representation of my heart, little did it know. The italics are out of place. You don't have them anywhere else in the poem, and they ...
Apr 17, 2015 -
Re: My Existence!
Hello darling. let's dance. I can't say I enjoyed this. It felt like you were trying to write a very pretentious, uppty poem, but what actually happened was it made ...
Apr 1, 2015 -
Re: Deleted 55
hey darling. let's dance. so i'm not sure what to think about this. there are some really brilliant moments, but there's also some not so brilliant moments. for instance, line ...
Mar 4, 2015